Wrote a opening to a story ( gory )?

I honestly think it's a good start. I like how you write as if you were telling the story to someone. You need to work on punctuation, though, I had to reread several lines to figure out when one sentence ended and another began. I think you should finish the story, let the reader know what happens next, does the monster die, how did she get that way, how does the town react, that sort of thing. Then do some editing and you'll have a good short story right in time for Halloween!